JCJazz,

Good effort so far and you have a solid foundation to work with. I agree with Alyn for the most part about the harmonies. They fit into the song well but there is a place or two where one part drops or is not sung at all that creates a hard panning effect which distracts from the lead vocals, which should be king. I think your lead vocal works really good with this song but maybe work a bit to be sure each word can be heard clearly.

I felt the backing vocals coming in during the instrumental breaks around 1:24 and 2:32 created awkward moments almost as if a wrong chord had been struck.

For me, the strength is in the song itself. I think you have written a better than average song with a good story line and made good choices of instruments. Well worth some additional time to polish it.

The style, lyrics and vocal arrangement are reminiscent of Kid Rock's 2010 album, Born Free. You may find it beneficial to listen to his work for some production polishing ideas.

Again, good effort and I am really enjoying your work. I hope you don't find my remarks too critical. It's not intended that way, just sharing my thoughts and that you may find them somewhat helpful.

Regards,

Charlie

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