Nice song Pete, it has some funny lines, and some cool playing. A couple things i noticed, that i always struggle with in music and lyrics writing. First, It seems that in some of the lines there had just too many words and they needed to be rushed to fit them in, I sometimes do this as well, and going back over and listening with an ear to making each phrase a bit less wordy really helps at times, giving the song a very smooth cadence. Secondly the song seems to be in the wrong key for your voice, you fight just a bit to do the lower notes, this causes a bit of pitchiness. Bring it up a tiny bit, one or two steps would allow you to stay in your better register. These two things can usually give the song a bit more of a dynamic feel.

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