Hi Rob,

Thanks for taking the time to critique my tune. I totally agree that it good to pare your lines down to as few syllables as possible. I usually do that exercise on my lyrics but if/when I get to redo the vocal I'll keep your ideas in mind. Not sure I'd want to change the key if that meant redoing the guitar tracks. But I might be able to digitally move them up a couple of intervals and still sound good. The other option is to do the vocal in the early morning when the voice is naturally lower. Also just to practice it more. There's a new track comp feature on Digital Performer I was wanting to try on this but didn't find the time so I went with my original vocal on this mix.