I think the 16th's mando is too busy
for your overall vibe which I like
a lot (and having coexisted for
decades with mandolins in different
bands I do like them - Janice plays
a bit on one).

I have learned from several helpful
folks here that stripping a song
down can often be the answer. Getting
to where there's nothing left to
take away rather than add. FWIW
my last three productions other
than vocals have only been 3-4
tracks.

Another thing, also in the FWIW department,
that I've learned a little about
is mastering software (thanks to
both floyd jane and tommyad).
I don't know where you are with it but
if you aren't using it you would find
that it is amazing how much it can
change the characteristic for a mix -
in both good and bad directions.

Having blathered all that it is really a
great melody and both of us
enjoyed the spin.

J&B

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