Hi Janice and Tom,
What a wonderful listen!
Individually, your performances are as professional anything out there on the world stage. Collectively, your performances paint a masterpiece. Très magnifique!!!
I really liked the 6-line verses. The aabccb rhyme scheme is perfect and well set with two groups of two lines of shorter meter followed by one line of longer meter. (I was at a Steve Seskin seminar once and this line-length pattern of 'short, short, long' is one lyric-structure technique that he said he enjoyed working with.)
The arrangement (in particular, the stopping of instrumentation on line 2 of the chorus) is creativity at its most inspired.
There's nothing to criticize here. All I could do was sit back, close my eyes and enjoy

In fact, I'm heading back there right now to do that again!
All the best,
Noel