Nice work. I think this is some great retro country ballad style music. Nice treatment of the topic.... maybe I'm slow on the uptake but I didn't, couldn't quite figure the back story out.

You use a technique in writing this that's not been used in country in quite some time.... repeating the first verse for the last. That used to be done a lot.


It took me a minute for the melody to click..... then I remembered the song this reminds me of...

David Allen Coe's Mona Lisa Lost her Smile.... the melody is really close.... I'm a big DAC fan so I'm digging this song of yours.




As far as the gorilla's.... do they like you busking them?

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