I like this one and listened to both versions - 2nd one a bit stronger. Trained musicians would think it's all real if they didn't know how it was made.

Since you've got the right voice for this kind of song, please do one thing: sing into the end words of your lines with the same power you use throughout - it sounds like you're backing off of important words like "disappear, night, light". You don't have to get operatic, just don't quit singing on those words.

I'm being sensitized to these things because I've found a good voice teacher - it doesn't mean I do them right myself.

Keep up the good work.

Steve

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