Originally Posted By: boehm
Hi Lawrence,

I like both versions. Your voice is just great.

Guenter


Guenter, Thank you.


Originally Posted By: FredM
Hi Lawrence,
Have listened to both versions... The first version wins for me
Voice and guitar are of course outstanding in both versions, but the second "orchestra" gets predictable after a while.
And the first version sounds more like "stone drunk again" IMHE(xperience) smile

G

Fred


Thanks for listening and commenting. Yes there is a repetitive thing happening with the piano.



Originally Posted By: Pat Marr
I like both versions too.. and I can see why you were looking for the arpeggiated instrumentation. But here are a couple of reasons why I prefer the original:

1) The arpeggiated thing has been done so many times it's hard to make it sound new, even when its wrapped in a clever new song like yours.

2) Your first go-round is unique to you. And I like the sparse arrangement with the prominent snare and background organ. It's more of a gutsy bluesy sound that matches the theme of your song without sounding like something that's been done before. Since you have such a signature sound, I almost hate to hear you venture into familiar territory... you're too good at being unique to bother with anything ordinary.

having said that, the second version is more lush and R&B whereas the first version was more sparse and bluesy.

I'd kind of like to hear horns in the 2nd version since you opted to take it in a more orchestrated direction. Or not. Both versions are great!



Thank you Pat. When I wrote this song I was trying to convey to a younger friend that he didn't have to try to reinvent the wheel every time he wrote a song. When I picked up my guitar this old 50's style just kind of came out and it was perfect for what I was tying to get across to him so I went all in with it and wrote this song.


Originally Posted By: R & AM
Hi Lawrence,

We like this one very much, but the first version is very different from this one and is also very good.
We don't know which one to choose.... so we'd better not laugh

Rob and Anne-Marie


Thank you both. I think they each have their place. And I think it's great to be able to play around with different styles so easily with BIAB!


Originally Posted By: floyd jane
What he said.

Excellent write. Killer vocal, as always.

The piano in the new version seems too "thin" to me - so it seems out of place in the production - against such a powerful vocal (incredible vocal). I had the sense that it needed to be fat and dark...(I like the "idea" of it)

I enjoyed both listens.

floyd


Thanks Floyd. The piano, bass and strings are midi from BIAB and rendered with the Dimension Pro soft synth that comes with Sonar. I didn't do much to them except roll off some low end on the bass and piano.


Originally Posted By: RichMac
I think the 1st version sounds more lonesome and soulful.
More down and out.
The 2nd version fuller and beautifully done makes me think of the platters.
Like both equally. Cheers


Thanks Rich, that's exactly what I was going for.