This is my favorite song from you so far.

I like the interesting chord progression in the verses.

Just a note: when typing the words, try grouping the lines. What I mean is, place all 5 lines in the verse together with no spaces. Stack all 4 in the chorus the same way. It makes it easier to grasp at a glance where one is in the song.

Quote:
Melancholy Blues

I'm not complete with out you.
I cant succeed you know its true.
With this lonesome melancholy blue.
Last night laid awake I saw a vision of your face.
I'm so weary and not sure what to do.

Chorus
You got me thinking while I'm in this state.
What else I'm gonna do.
Though my feelings may seem misplaced.
I cant seem to live without you.


just a minor nit ^^^^.... good job on the song.

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