Originally Posted By: c_fogle
This is really good Josie. One of your best writes so far I think.

Compliments and complaints? Only compliments from me for both the song and video. The lyrics have a nice flow between the daughter's 'today' and the mother's 'yesterday'. If I were pressed for a nit, I would suggest changing the second line in the first verse that uses "last night" to maybe saying "late in the night" or similar rather than the repetition.

The video followed the song quite nicely and despite the aggravation and frustrations you may have had producing it, the video looked like it was done by a Pro.

Good job all around. One of my favorites of yours so far. Your choice of backing instruments was excellent and fit the song perfectly. BG's were good too.

Thank you so much Charlie. It is so gratifying to hear comments like "your best so far" because it means that I am at least moving forward. I tried to find something to replace the repeat of the phrase "Last night" but couldn't make anything work. I thought of "that night" but that sounds funny since it sounds like it was a while ago and not just last night. So in the end I just decided to leave it and use a repetition in the same place in the second verse as well.

Originally Posted By: boehm
just beautiful. The song and the video.
Your frustration was worth it.
I enjoyed it a lot.


Guenter thank you so much for your consistently nice comments but I do wonder if the frustration was worth it!

Originally Posted By: tommyad
Joanne, This is one of your best writes. The cello works really well with the piano. Very well sung and great BGV. Loved the ending! Nicely arranged.I enjoyed it a lot. Tom

Hi Tommy. That means a lot. Thank you. I had to go back and listen to the ending to see what there was to like. Glad you liked the cello and piano. I got very lucky with the phrase RB generated at the end of the chorus.

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