Noel, thank you for such a thought out reply. To your last point about the ending I could see a tag of "I'm thinking, I'm thinking of you..." It would underline that this is in fact the title and the center of the song. The metaphor of being stone drunk on the pain and emptiness of being without the person of your affection is a very strong one and does it's best to overpower the song so your suggestion might help to mitigate that.

While I can't say that I knew what feminine and masculine rhymes were (before I looked them up); the two words as a single rhyme is spot on and I felt ok to leave it as I wrote it without a need to edit it after I'd finished. My working philosophy is - most of the time I simply need to get out of my own way and just create.

Thank you again for your generosity and kind words.