Welcome to the forum Adam!! Interesting song. I think you did a very good job with it. The music really captures the feel that I think you're going for-the chaos of modern life. I have two suggestions which I feel would improve the presentation: 1) put some reverb (ambience/echo) on the vocal (which is well done), and 2) I would not repeat the chorus music/lyrics twice each time but only once. I think the song is well done! Take care. Greg