Originally Posted By: c_fogle
I'm with Greg that you have a wonderful song, arrangement and I'll add you have a great musical bed as well.

I'm with Floyd and David regarding the lyrics. Contagious was the first thing to stand out as being out of place to me as you used it in the song and the lyrics seemed overly cliched in places. I will add that I also felt the lyrics were unsettled between your love interest's persona; being an artist in some instances and a card player elsewhere. You introduce your love interest as a painter in verse one to you being a card player in verse two and then in the chorus, she's a work of art that holds all the aces. I suggest if you rewrite some of the other suggestions you tighten the relationship into more of the card game analogy and drop the painting artist because you never really develop that angle of her personality.

This is a very good song and well worth your time and effort to tighten it up.

Charlie


Well said Charlie, all good ideas and solid points. This song was begging for a re-write, guess I just wanted someone to verify that for me.
Thanks,

Kenny