Like Alyn, it took some time for me to form a response.

You consistently write songs with the most emotional range, and this is one of them. Strong write, and the sparse delivery works.

The only nit is something that I've noticed in a number of your songs: you choose rhymes that are "correct", but draw attention to themselves because they feel rhymey or cliche. For example:

Heres a message just for you

It's a serviceable rhyme, but it's also a cliche. It's the sort of thing that I'd hope to rewrite in a later draft, because it feels more like filler than something that supports your message. To me, it simply dilutes your message. Similarly:

Cant remember all of what I said there at the bar
Years later as my head clears it all seems so biz-arre

The word "bizarre" feels like it was picked because it rhymed instead of it being the right word.

Personally, I think it's better to have a weaker rhyme, or even no rhyme than to do that. A Soldier's Things (Tom Waits) comes to mind of that sort of song that gets by without rhymes.

The other only nit is the melody on the verse feels like a AA sort of form, and it could use a bit more variety instead of sounding like the same thing twice.

Anyway, this isn't meant to sound negative. You're a really powerful writer with an original voice, and you write some really awesome stuff.

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?