Nice work my friend.

It's a nice, upbeat, feel good song.

Loved the line about waving goodbye to our vapor trail.... that was good. It created the perfect imagery in my mind.


One thing I think maybe didn't work as well as it could or should have, is the bridge. The song is sunny and upbeat and the bridge is kind of a musical downer... slower and darker... I would consider dropping the bridge and just come straight back into the chorus. This bridge seems to fit my personal rule for "bridge or not"..."NOT" ..... because it really doesn't seem to add any new or crucial info or a twist that makes you view the song from a totally new perspective suddenly after hearing it. It's more of a filler and you don't need or want filler for the sake of filler. If you're going to add a bridge, try making it shorter. Halve it to two simple lines that add some insight. I think part of my dislike for it was that it was too long. If you need to slow it down, temporarily lose some energy, and make it darker... don't stay there long. Get back to the chorus, sunshine and energy as quickly as possible. 2 short lines and done...

If it was mine, I would come right back from the solo into the chorus. Don't give it a chance to lose the energy level you have going.

And .... shorten the title to "Get the Mail"

Man, I really liked this song. It's got that "island theme" in it and I tend to love those kind of songs.... toes in the sand, drink in my hand.... (Chesney lyrics there.... my wife is a HUGE KC fan, so I've become somewhat of an expert on island country)

Excellent write.

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