Herb,

Good job of capturing that Maverick sound. The accordions work well (though they sort of swamp the vocal in a couple of spots in the last chorus - particularly your title).

Good that you are experimenting to find something new. You might consider not using the same image so often in such a small space - "hold her" 3 times in the first 6 lines and "moonlight" in your chorus right after using it in the verse. You also might consider changing "On my knees" to "On one knee" - those conjure different images... The fact that you're waiting and she's waiting sort of leaves no one doing anything (except waiting). Just some thoughts.

floyd

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