Originally Posted By: Sergio Guarneri

nice song,
good sound and real tracks ensemble.

Nice voice too.

Sergio

Thanks for giving it a spin, Sergio:)

Originally Posted By: Guitarhacker
Nice work my friend.

It's a nice, upbeat, feel good song.

Loved the line about waving goodbye to our vapor trail.... that was good. It created the perfect imagery in my mind.


One thing I think maybe didn't work as well as it could or should have, is the bridge. The song is sunny and upbeat and the bridge is kind of a musical downer... slower and darker... I would consider dropping the bridge and just come straight back into the chorus. This bridge seems to fit my personal rule for "bridge or not"..."NOT" ..... because it really doesn't seem to add any new or crucial info or a twist that makes you view the song from a totally new perspective suddenly after hearing it. It's more of a filler and you don't need or want filler for the sake of filler. If you're going to add a bridge, try making it shorter. Halve it to two simple lines that add some insight. I think part of my dislike for it was that it was too long. If you need to slow it down, temporarily lose some energy, and make it darker... don't stay there long. Get back to the chorus, sunshine and energy as quickly as possible. 2 short lines and done...

If it was mine, I would come right back from the solo into the chorus. Don't give it a chance to lose the energy level you have going.

And .... shorten the title to "Get the Mail"

Man, I really liked this song. It's got that "island theme" in it and I tend to love those kind of songs.... toes in the sand, drink in my hand.... (Chesney lyrics there.... my wife is a HUGE KC fan, so I've become somewhat of an expert on island country)

Excellent write.

Thanks for all of those thoughts and recommendations, Herb. I gotta' say that getting a thumbs up from you means a lot.

I would have liked to weave in some Hawaiian slack key guitar - I started to record my own, but gave it up. Luckily some of those lead guitar RT's sounded 'island' enough to work.

Btw, I changed the title to 'Get The Mail.'

Originally Posted By: Islansoul
Great job!

Thanks for listening.

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
Scott, since folks are comparing we'll throw ours in. How's about Chesney meets Buffet? smile This has a most enjoyable upbeat feel and the write is really good with nice imagery. As Janice just said "let's go there right now!"

J&B

"Let's go there right now!" That's exactly what I was hoping for. Have fun:)

I really didn't know where this song was going when I started it, all I had was that 'Call your Mama...' line. We lived in HI for a few years, and I did sing karaoke to my wife at the Outrigger Reef Waikiki during our first days there. Once that story found it's way into the song, it was off to the islands. Glad you enjoyed it.

Happy New Year!

Originally Posted By: KeithS
I love it.

Thank you, Keith.

Originally Posted By: dani48
Hi, Scott !

I loved it too !!!

Cheers
Dani

Appreciate that, Dani. Sorry I'm so tardy in responding.

Originally Posted By: MarioD
It all been said! I really loved the song after the first verse. Everything after that verse is radio ready IMHO.

I agree with Floyd about replacing that finger picking part. IMHO it should be replaced.

Thanks for the feedback, Mario. Happy New Year!

Originally Posted By: ROG
Hi Scott.

That was one powerful mix and I have to say that personally, I liked it exactly as it was.

This song has the makings of a classic and you really need to be posting some more like this.

Great storyline, and super vocals.

Loved it!

ROG.

Whoa! Thank you, Rog!! Happy New Year:)

Originally Posted By: F.M.M.
hi scott fantastic peace love it great job thanks for sharing eric awesome vocal

Thanks for checking it out.

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