Cool song.... this used to be a TV show back when I was a kid...

I would lose the crickets and especially the fire. The crackling fire sounds like static or vinyl record noise.... it's a distraction you can do without in this song.

Everything else sounds good and well balanced.

When you post a cover, you should also post your license info that gives you legal permission to post the song publicly.

You can find my music at:
www.herbhartley.com
Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.