Well first, congratulations on tackling fawm 2016. You're certainly capable and it will be fun to tag along on your journey.

Nice first song. My musings about it are mostly observational and the tiniest of nits.

I liked the music and choice of instruments.

Lyrically, I liked that you changed the lyric of "small grey town" to "small dark town" when you sang it. I'd keep that change.

I'll note that the lyrics "At break they'd try to trip her She'd crawl up in her hole" is the only line in the song where Suzy breaks, retreats or shows a chink in her armor. I'm unsure if it's intentional, but the line stood out to me. It came across as a line written to match rhyming.

This is going to be a fun project for you and I'm looking forward to hearing the fruits of your labors.

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