Much better. The chorus works, but the melody sounds like it was pre-composed, and then the lyrics added afterwards - they're pleasant, but don't really flow.

But 7:29... That's gotta be some sort of awesome song for me to make something of that length. wink

By the way, have you considered trying some harmonies with Vocaloid? I'm usually too lazy, because I've only got the free version of the editor that only supports a single voice. I haven't heard it used too much, but it might be cool to try.

Hrm... seems like I made it through the whole song after all. laugh

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?