several comments:

so many songwriters neglect the beginning of songs and their song has a hard time getting off the ground . . . not this song . . . the beginning catches you the minute you start listening!

I like to use double entendres in music, so when I hear someone else do it, I smile to myself.
when you did a break at "this is gonna stop....right here", I was like YES! Good Job! way to drive home the point using the music to emphasize the point!

I like the emphasis with the drums on "the rest of me might just keep on running" - I think I would have even seen you take it out another bar so I could run far enough away grin

very well constructed and thought out sound Floyd! Blessings!