Wow Floyd... this is a great submission on Memorial Day weekend!

I think you did a great job of developing the psychology of young love, and the tendency at that age to fall in love with the thought of something more than with the reality of it. In fact, I'd say that tendency continues throughout life.

You are the master of saying interesting things through simple language.. I am truly amazed to watch how you navigate everyday speech patterns while avoiding all of the cliches that are so firmly embedded in that realm.

Its interesting too, the way you left the story somewhat unresolved, after building the audience's interest and providing enough information to make them feel invested in the outcome. I'm not sure if I like that or not... ;-)

But it doesn't really matter, because the important thing is that the lack of resolution impacted me. If I were a young person hearing this on the radio (or wherever young people hear music these days) I would probably want to keep hearing it, in hope that I could eventually wrap my brain around whatever mysterious ingredient was keeping me fascinated and captivated.

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/ey71h8ep047758h/AAC12jNM0Hz9Q8zsh5iDeqNHa?dl=0