Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Pat,

EXCELLENCE ABOUNDS.


aw gee, floyd, you don't have to go there! I'd be happy with "interesting" ( which can be interpreted to mean just about anything)

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Your attention to detail is astounding. Like the Windows opener on the computer..
Cool! You noticed!

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The blink-change was very clever!

I was trying to portray the disconnect between what people read and what they want to believe... which is made harder to determine because people spin their profiles to make themselves sound more interesting and desirable than they are. Dating sites are an interesting study in human nature...

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... the "date my mother" camera work was perfect!

that started out to be a throwaway line, mostly because I needed a rhyme for "other"... but months ago when I bounced the song prototype off you and Bud, one of you came back with something about being interested in seeing how the "didn't really want to date my mother" line would be portrayed in a video. CHALLENGE! ;-) (for better or worse, that's how it turned out)

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"...and a man with enough cash to make it all happen" HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!

I was surprised to learn that there are really women on dating sites whose goal is to help as many men as possible spend all their money.

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Miss Terious. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!

not that far removed from the clever names people choose on such sites...

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The progress bar on the rose was over-the-top!!!!!

hard as it may be to imagine, electric roses are real! (but the progress bar not so much)

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You worked the story so well. The double-wide was a nice touch.

in the same sense that a classic country song needs a train or a pickup truck or a beer, a song about online dating needs a double wide... ;-)

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The instrumentation is perfect for this type song/story. As good as Larry Groce's "Junkfood Junkie". And the mix is excellent.

ah, you're very kind!.. I already mentioned in a previous reply where the idea came from for that style of song/ (Roy Bookbinder "New Age Woman"). I started out with something closer to Larry Groce's guitar version, but once I tried the chords against the style with dobro, I was sold. For an animation the up-tempo bluegrass really keeps the story moving...


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The lyric is so well written that it ought to be repeated in the thread, too...

It is a great read and an great example to other writers.

BORED AND LONELY LATE ONE NIGHT ... WAS SURFING ON A DATING SITE
READING PROFILES IN MY USUAL FASHION
THINKIN' THAT THERE REALLY OUGHT... TO BE A GAL WHO'S YOUNG AND HOT
ENOUGH TO TAME MY NASTY REDNECK PASSION

SIFTIN' SAND IN HOPES OF GOLD... 'CAUSE GALS MY AGE ALL LOOK SO OLD
AN' I DIDN'T REALLY WANT TO DATE MY MOTHER
THEY ALL LIKE BEACHES WINE AND TRAVEL,... NO MYSTERIES HERE LEFT TO UNRAVEL
EACH PROFILE READS EXACTLY LIKE THE OTHER

THEN CAME A PHRASE THAT CAUGHT MY EYE,... I COULDN'T LET IT PASS ME BY
2 WORDS WERE ALL SHE'D WRITTEN : “50 SHADES”
I THOUGHT THAT IT WAS KIND OF GROOVY... REFERENCE TO A DIRTY MOVIE
HOPING THAT THIS TIME I HAD IT MADE

I SENT HER AN ELECTRIC ROSE... AND ASKED IF SHE WOULD BE OPPOSED
TO MEETING ME TO SEE IF WE MIGHT CLICK
I HOPED SHE'D BE THE CAT'S MEOW, AND FANTASIZED ABOUT JUST HOW
I 'D HANDLE SUCH A LUSTY WANTON CHICK

DROVE UP TO HER DOUBLE WIDE...KNOCKED ON THE DOOR AND WENT INSIDE
WHAT I SAW THAT NIGHT BLEW ME AWAY
CATS OF EVERY COLOR SWARMED .. I NEVER FELT SO MISINFORMED
THEN I KNEW SHE MEANT “50 SHADES OF STRAY”

PERHAPS MY MOTIVES HAD BEEN SHADY, BUT THIS WAS ONE INSANE CAT LADY
AND 50 CATS AIN'T MY IDEA OF FUN
THE ONES THAT WEREN'T ALREADY FIGHTIN'... CLIMBED ON ME AND STARTED BITIN'
I KNEW RIGHT THEN AND THERE THIS DATE WAS DONE

BUT I ESCAPED (I'M NOT SURE HOW)... GUESS WE CAN LAUGH ABOUT IT NOW
MY THINKIN' HERE WAS SLOWER THAN MOLASSES
BUT AS THIS AWFUL MEM'RY FADES, IF FUTURE BRINGS ME 50 SHADES...
NEXT TIME I REALLY HOPE THAT THEY'RE ...SUNGLASSES


gee, thanks for doing that! Seeing it written out does emphasize the odd rhyming scheme


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This needs to go viral. I truly hope it does.

BIG STANDING O.

I hope it goes viral too... but my videos tend to stall at about 200 views, so I won't hold my breath.
Floyd, thanks for the encouragement you offer... not only to me, but to all of the people who post songs here on the forum! This forum owes a lot to you


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