Cool song - reminds me of the Prickly Pear's interpretation of Annabel Lee.
I think you need to tweak the mix a bit. The piano is too far back at the beginning of the song - it sits well as the song gets moving but not in the intro.
Once the song's texture thickens the distant piano sounds a little muddy of indistinct.
There're some sibilant sounds on you voice as well - this is exaggerated by the reverb. You can treat the vocal or the sss sounds before the reverb and that'd help heaps.
Cool song though.
Well worth working on a little more.


Cheers
rayc
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