Hi Powderman,

Nice song. I really enjoyed hearing it. You've assembled it really, really well. For what it's worth, I have only one suggestion - a prosody one. For the last line of the chorus, instead of saying, "Lord please make it rain" in even quarter notes, I'd try,

Lord (beat 1, half-note), please (beat 3) make (beat 4) it (beat 4½) rain (beat 1, next bar). This placement also follows the pattern of the hook (Lord make it rain) and simply adds an extra note on beat 4½.

To my hearing this places a little more musical emphasis on "please" and this sounds more like a plea to heaven to me. This is just a thought, though, and you've probably tried it already and decided against it

Overall, though, this song was well worth the listen.

Regards,
Noel


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