Rob,

This is magnificent!!!! I don't think I've ever heard you sound so brilliant... and that's really saying something because your and Anne-Marie's works always sound 100% professional.

What really stood out to me here was the way the lyrics flowed... outstanding prosody. I was fascinated by the effect that the non-rhyming verses created when the chorus came around.

Because ears are so used to hearing rhyme in lyrics, leaving it out draws heaps of attention to rhymes when they finally arrive. By keeping the rhyming at bay for 6 lines in the first section, when the chorus finally hits, the strength of the consonance rhyme with the words that end in the 'n' sound is really pronounced. I was hypnotised by the effect you created. Normally consonance rhymes are the weakest kind of rhyme/relationship but in this song, that was not the case. This is very strategic lyric craftsmanship. Your word movement, your melody, your arrangement and your attention to rhyme and non-rhyme were a match made in heaven... as I said earlier, outstanding prosody!!!

You've definitely raised the forum's 'bar of excellence' a few notches with this creation!

I also congratulate Anne-Marie for persevering and getting this song back on track. She has done an amazing job with salvaging the audio. Awesome!!!!

All the best,
Noel

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