Originally Posted By: Noel96
Rob,

This is magnificent!!!! I don't think I've ever heard you sound so brilliant... and that's really saying something because your and Anne-Marie's works always sound 100% professional.

What really stood out to me here was the way the lyrics flowed... outstanding prosody. I was fascinated by the effect that the non-rhyming verses created when the chorus came around.

Because ears are so used to hearing rhyme in lyrics, leaving it out draws heaps of attention to rhymes when they finally arrive. By keeping the rhyming at bay for 6 lines in the first section, when the chorus finally hits, the strength of the consonance rhyme with the words that end in the 'n' sound is really pronounced. I was hypnotised by the effect you created. Normally consonance rhymes are the weakest kind of rhyme/relationship but in this song, that was not the case. This is very strategic lyric craftsmanship. Your word movement, your melody, your arrangement and your attention to rhyme and non-rhyme were a match made in heaven... as I said earlier, outstanding prosody!!!

You've definitely raised the forum's 'bar of excellence' a few notches with this creation!

I also congratulate Anne-Marie for persevering and getting this song back on track. She has done an amazing job with salvaging the audio. Awesome!!!!

All the best,
Noel


Thank you Noel!

What an analysis... I didn't know I could write like that ;-).
Just kidding, thank you for taking the time to analyzing my song this thoroughly. That is really appreciated!

As for rhyming versus non-rhyming. Lately I let go of 'forced' rhyming because very often it's getting in the way of creating emotion. I'm no Leonard Cohen ;-)
The timing of the song and lyrics were mostly created unconsciously I think. No real conscious/anticipation process involved here.
What I do try to avoid our clichés, which is getting more and more hard because, as you know, everything about anyone or anything has already been said in millions of songs.
When I finished the song, and my Cubase project broke down completely (the only thing that could be heard was a pounding random noise) I was completely pissed off. I knew I had something special in this song. Not only the last project failed, but any other saved work from before as well, unbelievable.

So thanks again to Anne-Marie for her salvation work ;-)

Rob

We are Rob Meulman and Anne-Marie Bovenkamp from The Netherlands.

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