Thank you, MFsor, Alyn, and Scott. That all so encouraging.

Later, I realized that no one had the benefit of hearing it without that last repeat, but as-is the words did come out a little different than the other spots, kinda proper ending inflection-y. But having your opinions on it, and the whole thing is really helpful, so thanks MFsor -- I can always draft a version with more bass/meat and just see. Suggestions on other instruments, or a style (or maybe a song you think might be a good, rough example?)

Thank you, Ayln. I try to make all words count, and keep it all simple, avoiding the cliche when I can, or something so abstract that as a listener I'd have to really study them to figure out what they mean, if anything. "The raven flew over the iron pit and got peanut butter in his paper raincoat." Paper raincoat...hmmm...that's nice....

I'm not all that, but for me it's easy to hear lyrics where the writer just went for the easy rhyme and arbitrarily forced something clunky in, rather than rethink the whole verse to come up with a better solution. Jimmy Webb said when that happens, take your favorite line out of the verse. It's probably the problem. You can always put it back in.

In a perfect world, I'd love to only use the piano, you are right about that, Alyn, and I'll give that a try. I'm dependent of using the BIAB generated, regenerated tracks. I don't know how to manipulate notes, I mean I know how, but moving them around in the sheet screws everything up, so there are spots where any instrument stops abruptly, or has a hitch when making the change from one chord to the next set. Sometimes I've enveloped it down or punched it out and put another instrument over that spot.

Thank you all again, any that might follow this, for taking the time to listen and respond.

Andy

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