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A House That Catches Your Light

A few years ago my family had the experience of designing and building our own house. We had a contractor but did a ton of work ourselves - it was about the most exhausting and exhilarating year of this old timer`s life.This song is an attempt to capture some of those feelings.

Key=Db , Tempo 100, Length (m:s)=3:36
8 bar intro, 78 bar chorus, from bar 9 to bar 86. Repeat x1 chorus
No Melody
No Soloist track.
Song is saved with Volume, Pan, Reverb, Chorus, Bank0,
Style is _STOMPIN.STY (Stompin' Train Indie Folk)

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A House That Catches Your Light

come with me
where waves of mountains
fall into fields of green
with a bundle of straw
and a handful of earth
we`ll raise a roof over our dreams

I`ll plane down my edges
you`ll remind me where the end is
bind me with love
when my back breaks
and though the roof may leak
and the hinges creak
the rainbow will not be disgraced
will not be disgraced

we`ll build a dream house a bird house
a blood sweat and tears house
where swallows rest from their flight
we`ll cook and carouse there
when nothings stirring but the mouse dear
we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight
in a house that catches your light
a house that catches your light

come with me
where waves of mountains
fall into fields of green
with a bundle of straw
and a handful of earth
we`ll raise a roof over our dreams

sometimes I`ll get discouraged
try to quit in a flourish
step outside watch the thunder roll
but like the genie in his tomb
I`ve already seen these rooms
you will deck with the colours of your soul
the colours of your soul

we`ll build a dream house a bird house
a blood sweat and tears house
where swallows rest from their flight
we`ll cook and carouse there
when nothings stirring but the mouse dear
we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight
in a house that catches your light
a house that catches your light


© Robert Cordrey Nov.2016

"with a bundle of straw
and a handful of earth
we`ll raise a roof over our dreams"


"we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight
in a house that catches your light"


A few of the good lines - amongst many... this might be my favorite write of yours, Robert. It is "poetic", yet "accessible"...

Some of the lines seem to have a few more beats (syllables) than fit comfortably into the musical line - which in this case is, actually, very effective - sort of like "folk rap" - take that further and you might invent a new genre... (the instrumentation speaks to that, as well...)

I like this.

floyd

Robert, you have captured what everyone yearns for here! Love the line about placing a roof over our dreams. Good job! Thanks, Torrey

Love it Robert. Great song, and a really, really, really good title!!

That`s very kind, Floyd... and acutely observed on those extra syllables as well. The verses with internal rhymes came last and when I tried singing them it was a bit of a mouthful & I almost decided to give the song a reggae style...maybe if there`s a 2nd version in future.

Robert

Torrey,

Thank you for that- glad you liked it.
It sure is a cool feeling to see something you`ve held for years as an idea grow walls and a roof... have to pinch yourself when you`re finally walking around inside.

Robert

David,

Thank you, you`ve made my day. When I wrote the title line I knew it summed up what I wanted to say ... and wondered if listeners would "get it".

Robert

Greg,

Your keen observations are always much appreciated - if they chime with Floyd`s, all the better!
Many thanks,

Robert

Hi Robert,

Wow! You've pulled out all the stops on this one. It's a terrific listen. The opening refrain for each verse really captured my imagination!


What stunning imagery you've created with a mere 29 words. When I say these words aloud, they seem to roll like quicksilver... it's a really captivating effect. Wonderful writing!

Regards,
Noel

Robert, I too endorse the comments made above by others.

This is really beautiful writing, and the arrangement is quite masterful.

An excellent delivery, no question.

Hello, Robert

Beautiful song with good melody and nice vocal.
The start of the A melody is especially pleasant.
Your songs are definitely in direct descent from Pete Seeger and Woody Guthrie.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.

Best Regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Hi Robert

The song title is the ‘kernel of this song’ the ability to write all around it’‘ is fabulous.
Its flexibility it’s the “hook, and I suspect you knew that from the get go.
I just sat and said to myself ,wish I had thought of that.
Over the years having built three myself, at sea, mountain, and finally small holding, always the main criteria was view with light, but for you to so lovingly sought for the light to illuminate your wife and your obvious pride and love in her, was very clever song crafting.
Musically, vocally, all round, you have a very marketable product here
I was similarly moved by song ‘House of Stone and Light ‘ by Martin Page a song who’s lyrical expression and song crafting I rate up there among the best in the world.
You can be very proud of this one

Paddy G

Robert, what a great title for a song. In conjures up all sorts of ideas about what the song will be about before even listening. Great write. Raise a roof over our dreams indeed!

Robert,

Some really exceptional lyrics here... Great delivery as well. Really enjoyed it.

Bob

Awesome tune Robert

Hi Robert,

Love it! I can feel the joy! You have captured your experience well with the feel and lyrics. What a great line, "with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams." Thanks for sharing. btw Is it a cob house?

Pauline
PG Music Team

Hi Robert,

Such a nice subject to write a song about. Beautiful house it seems, is it the one in the picture!
Very nice song and chord progression.

Paddy,
Thank you very much!
Your thoughts (and experiences, it seems - four houses built! Oh my, I might be able to go through all that once more but I think that`ll be enough) are very much in line with my own here.
My wife had to be the project manager as were building where I could barely speak the language - looking back at her endurance and good humour throughout I`m still amazed.
I write in a very simple bubble map way, in this case at the centre was " building a bird house", but when the title line came along it moved to the centre and it was a very quick write.
I`d forgotten about that very good Martin Page song - thanks for sending me to listen again.

Robert

Thank you for listening and commenting.
I`m really pleased the arrangement works - its a cool style on its own but I did work on many changes within the framework.

Robert