Thanks Mick!
Once again thanks to all who have provided constructive feedback. I think I'm onto a fix. To be sure, here's the link to a newer song in development which I think is coming out better:
http://www.maemo-daemons.org/Raining%20in%20Amsterdam.wmaI think this will be the "template" for remixing others I've been working on, because I really like how it's turning out. If I get feedback that confirms this, I'll plug these lessons learned into "Who Am I" and get back with my cohort.
Sooo... thoughts on the above?