Nice work.

I like the writing too. This has a smooth polished sound to it. Always a good thing IMHO.

I heard a few things that I'd like to comment on. (of course)

I like a snappy snare but this one could probably stand to do down a few dB .... nothing major.
Maybe it's my ears or these speakers I'm listening on, but I had a hard time picking out the words/lyrics. Maybe just a touch more high end on the vocals would help them cut through or a dB or two more gain. Again nothing major.

I was catching some overtones of groups like the Bee Gees in there. With the smoothness and the harmonies.

All in all a really good song and a great job on the production.

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