Thanks for the comments. Greatly appreciate you taking time to listen and drop a note

I'll look at the verses again Noel, I doubt im making that kind of a change. That's a huge undertaking and can derail it all. It plays well, I get a lot of questions and occasionally some will quietly say they also had a horrible experience like this. And people will line up to coyly ask if it is was me.

There is so much personal emotion and personal demons, no outsider would know about unless we'd been directly involved.

I wanted it in 1st person. I don't want to deflect it to another person. For me, that's the impact. Some won't like this song, while others are drawn to it.

About metaphors, I'm a big fan of them, I think I did not use any because I wanted it to be clear. There are a few word twists, "..the papers moved...to dwell 'in' someone else's pain...,", rather thank the common saying, "dwell on"...but overall nothing is left up to need to decipher.

Thank you again for your suggestions and observations, Noel. Good fodder for the next one.


Last edited by Andy A - USA; 02/27/17 11:58 AM. Reason: I did an awful job in the original post. I tried to clear thing up a bit.
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