Ver 2 is better than the original. Easily noticed by playing a bit of 1 and then 2 as a comparison.
Nice job improving it.

That said, to me the saxes don't 'fit in' the mix in either version. That's a whole 'nother aspect with MIDI. You have to really work to balance various sound sources .. and then the patches themselves.
Sorry, just trying to help and its only my opinion, so take it with a grain of salt. Nobody else noticed or mentioned it, so maybe it's just me.
Getting the saxes to 'sit' in the mix would be what I focused on next.

I do not work here, but the benefits are still awesome
Make your sound your own!