Hi opsvisor,
This is a very good 1st attempt.
I very rarely give advice on a mix of a song because I may not be that good myself
I would just give you a thought - your vocal could be stronger, more up front - by that I mean be bold when singing. It just needs more confidence.
In my opinion you have the voice, use it to it's full potential.
You are among a very friendly group of people on this forum and I'm sure others will give good advice.

Regards
Michee


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