Hi Ed,
Just my POV. I love this song too. First you have a nice voice. If you are more comfortable singing ballads why not slow this song down to fit your vocal style. The guitar playing would sound better if it were smoother - another reason to slow it down perhaps.

The background is not helping. I'd move in much closer to the camera and change the background.

The overall sound quality would probably be nicer mic'd but I'm not that video tech savvy so someone else I'm sure will advise you there.

Looking forward to seeing your next version.

Josie