Hi Donna,

Nice! Good to hear you. If I may, one suggestion on the lyric:

At the beginning of the second verse, you say: "She ended her life on a grey wintry day"
Might I suggest: "She chose the angels on a grey wintry day"

the remainder of the verse makes it quite obvious she took her life. "She ended her life" is a wee bit stark for the beauty and grace of the rest of the lyric.

That's just my opinion and I could be way off. But, it's a thought that occured to me as I listened.

Very nice sing. Ya did good!

Alan

Last edited by Al-David; 10/16/17 02:36 PM.

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