David,
It has potential for a movie/cinema track. And yeah, as someone mentioned already, you usually want to avoid th3e vocal spikes and let the movie's sound/music director add his own. For an "in-movie" track, this could be massaged to work okay. However, as a trailer, you would need a different approach. Trailers need to start rather minimalist but yet powerful with more subtle parts between. The subtle parts have to compliment the more forceful strikes. Also, the trailer has to build - both in volume and depth. Over the course of the trailer (usually 30 seconds or 60 seconds, new complimentary layers are usually added.
I don't call myself an expert by any definition as I've only had a few cuts licensed. But I did learn that much, for what it's worth. Here are links to several I got licensed, if you're interested or think they might be helpful:
1. Piano Purgatory:
https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=5012149&q=hi&newref=1This is an in-movie track - it peaks and drops and repeats that pattern several times.
2. Dancing In Her Dreams:
https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=7760129&q=hi&newref=1This one was used to open the first scene of the movie it was selected for. You'll notice it builds in volume and layers and repeats that process several times throughout the duration of the song. This could be used as a trailer but it works better inside the movie.
3. Don't Look Back:
https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v3/player.cfm?type=single&songid=7256569&q=hi&newref=1It was used for the tailor as it had several rather quiet spots between the builds. The deeper you get into the song, the more pronounced the percussions become - primarily the timpanis/kettles.
For what that might be worth. Wishing you lots of success with your project!
Alan
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