kybordr..I'll tell you something--your first two lyric lines immediately 'captured' me and hooked me into listening to the whole song...reason: you used a very interesting set up rhymes based on words having a "cha" sound:

You took a CHApter from that book about deparCHur,
perfectly capCHur'd.

Then you used something similar, an alliteration to start subsequent verses:
You STOLE the last SCENE
You FACE the FUTURE

Also "tragic/magic" is a similar kind of link.

Not sure if you did this intentionally, but I believe that it makes a kind of listening 'hook', and would be good to find other places to do it in the lyric.


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