This is pretty cool. We don't get too many songs that have spoken verses. It worked really well.

I liked the sung choruses. Just a thought.... the harmonies sounded too "perfect" with the way you did them. I'm guessing you used a harmonizer of some sort or another. Here's a suggestion. If the harmonizer gives you individual tracks or you can separate them into individual tracks.... take the time to learn the tracks one at a time and sing them yourself. It makes for a more realistic backing.

Loved the writing of the story.... made me think back to doing many of the same things and oh yeah.... those stingray bikes with the banana seats.... mine didn't have a sissy bar either and yeah... I recall it had 10 speeds.... what fun.

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