It's very polished and nicely put together BUT the 1st line put me off every time. You sing FURATIVE rather than "furtive". Now, that may be local, slang, dialectic or something else but it caught me each time I listened & held me head so I missed the next few bars.
The 1st stop towards the end of the solo is a bit uncertain - the 2nd works better.
That solo is a little anemic but that's OK as the story & hook carry the song.
Great story of a song taking its time to become what it is.
I think it's a fine song.

Cheers
rayc
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