Since you said...
"I hope you like this song as much as I do. Let me know what you think."

...I'll give you my impressions straight up. I think you have a bunch of talent and I like a lot of your stuff. I wanted to like this (because of your introduction of it), but I think it "misses".

I listened before you answered LPMan - and figured that you were using the sweater to mean "her". I don't think it works, though. You personify the sweater from start to finish and never transition to "her" (I kept waiting for that to happen in the end). I think the main "problem" (I'm calling it a problem because it is to me. It may not be for anyone else) is it remains your sweater ("my sweater") from start to finish.

The "up and ran away" line brought to mind the classic image of a guys jeans being so dirty they could walk away on their own.
It often sounds like the guy is getting a little kinky with a sweater.
"I liked to hold it close on dark cold nights."

The line
"It smelled so sweet like her perfume."
only serves to further make it seem like it's the actual sweater your are talking about - since SHE would, of course, smell of her perfume (the "like" throws it back to the sweater).

"It had a smile that could light up the room."
Makes it obvious that you are attempting to refer to HER and not the sweater, but, again, I get no transition to allow that payoff.


There are a number of good descriptive lines - all the way through.
"little hole on the lower left side."
"stick my finger inside."
"a stitch on the right hand pocket."
"It was grey. It went with anything."
All good stuff.

But, overall, it did not work for me.

The instruments and the mix sound good. I thought the vocal sounded a bit "boxy". The vocal itself is good (yours always are), but I thought the processing did not quite fit the "sorrowful ballad" that this is. There are no "tails" - delay or reverb - that I would expect. That is, of course, a purely personal preference...



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