Hi Dani48,

I was torn about writing this post, because I want to be clear from the start that this is an excellent song. It's lots of fun and it really does capture that Beach Boys vibe. But I just thought you should know that -- and this comes from a native English speaker -- you might think about some minor modifications to the lyrics. First, "The boards are ready and so should we" doesn't really work. Maybe nobody else found that jarring, but I did. You could say "the boards are ready and so should we be," with "be" at the end there, but since "be" is not part of a rhyme, maybe something like "The boards are ready and we are, too," might work better. And secondly, "afar" is a word used only in poetry; no English speaker would really say "you and me afar." Maybe you could work in "there we are" or something.

But I want to be clear, I just said that in the spirit of helpfulness to someone that I thought might be operating in a second language. With or without these notes, your song is a lot of fun. I wish I could come up with songs like that, and I enjoyed it a lot.

Have fun,
Buttrey