Dark Night of the Soul sounds good.

I'd suggest that it needs to be more interesting. Essentially, new things have to come in on a regular basis. It could be adding a percussion part in one section, then a repeating piano riff in the next, but something different needs to be occurring. What you have is a good basis for doing this.

I listened for a bit, then jumped through the piece randomly. It sounded pretty much the same at every jump in point.

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