It really reminds me of Joe Jackson's Jumpin' Jive album and it's got great energy.

I wouldn't presume to tell you what needs changing but I will be so bold as to let you know what I would have done had it been my tune. That's because I'll always presume the artist got at least close to what they were aiming for and I've not heard anything else you've done to compare your style. As such I'm not saying you've done anything wrong, or that it can be improved, more how I would done it slightly differently... the tune stands great on it's own.

I would have added an almost 'singing down the telephone' type vocal... Not too pronounced but just enough to evoke an old 78rpm type of sound.... Either that or go down the thoroughly modern route that Joe Jackson took (he does have a slightly raspy voice anyway).

I don't mind at all the extended intro and don't think it would sound out of place on an album track, but agree it would be too long on a 'single'.

But like I said; I enjoyed listening to it and think it's got great energy. smile

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