THIS is very cool.

Nice lead picking...loved that tone. What RT was that?

This has a really nice energy level. Your vocal is really well done and you have a good voice for this style.

My one recommendation is to try to get those accents, where the drums play but the band stops and hits accents, a little more powerful. Just a minor issue IMHO. And this might be related to this next issue.....

Oh yeah.... it has a high noise floor. Use an audio editor to trim the noise out at the start and end. You can't really hear it once the band comes in. That hiss is also muddling up the cleanliness of those accents too. It puts some noise in there with the drums. See if you can find the source of it. I find, in my studio recordings, it is often coming from the mic input or a guitar input.... but almost always in the audio inputs section. The real tracks are generally totally quiet regarding noise floors. If you find it is on the vocal track.... solo that track and listen with cans.... if there's a hiss in there, you found it. Just use volume envelopes to mute the track in the parts where the hiss is going to be a problem. The band covers it up but in that accent area, it might be a good idea to envelope the volume of the vocal track to zero in between the vocal phrasings so you have absolute silence for the drums to play unimpeded. Anyway... just rambling.... and thinking out loud.

Kinda sounds like my dog.... she don't bite no one but me.

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