Originally Posted By: Torrey Bliss
Paul, I agree with Merrio all the way on this. It is a catchy tune and your vocal is outstanding on it! I would also love to hear what it would sound like with some harmony in the vocals in places but as you said were never done with our tunes. You’ve done excellent work here so far! Thanks, Torrey


Hi Torney

Many thanks for your kind words. I started to rewrite the words from the position of talking about a man and his story as one suggested they were not keen on the “preachy” type of songwriting. I’m still thinking about that one. Also as some have read into my song a sexual connotation I’ve started to rewrite the words to remove all possibility of that being so, but it has changed the song somewhat which is a shame. However I broke my fibula just over a week ago and now can’t get around easily and especially not into my office where its a bit tricky. That all said, when i get back to editing I will continue where I left off. I would like to add a piano to pad some chords and I would like to add harmony as you suggested so it certainly is not a finished song yet. I’ll report back in the future with an update when I can.

God bless, Paul

Last edited by Paul Haynes; 08/20/18 04:17 AM.