Originally Posted By: rayc
Terrific narrative and your voice is right for it too. There's an occasional essing that might be tamable.
The arrangement is nice - sparse and I excepted it to build.
My only nit is in the lyric - "... off of..." doesn't work for me but I'm a retired teacher so ignore me.
Lovely stuff.


Thanks so much Ray! Really appreciate the nice review. I think "off of" is conversational which is what most of the modern writers go for. Not sure of the technical correctness....I'm sure you know that much better than I. Thanks again! Take care. Greg