Rustyspoon...I found your track very interesting! First reactions:
Your instrumentation was too busy as you started the vocal...I think you should back off some of the rhythm elements, at least in the first verse, to allow the listener to focus on your lyric and its' message...then, as you build the song to the conclusion, you can gradually add elements to reach a "full texture" by the time you get to the end.

What is your native language? I wondered whether your selection of phrases was the result of an attempt to translate into English something that was very poetic in your native tongue..or if you intentionally constructed these phrases, like "degrading locomotion" and "doctor's precaution"...they are interesting, but in a bizarre way, in English--they don't really bring any meaning.

I also really liked the 'wild' vocal add-in's that you did--they really contributed to the "latin jungle' type of feel...I thought of Martin Denny in the 1970's.."jungle lounge music"..very interesting!

i can't comment on the mixing, I struggle in that area, but keep on being creative!!

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