Quietly driving backing lays the tension on and under this emotively delivered and well sung vocal. Really, really nice.

Couldn't help but read the comments on "the line", though I try to ignore other comments until I've formed my own "view". Here's the way I take it. He's talking to someone at the point of breakup who is clearly showing him "no emotion" in delivering the news. Yeah, I'd say there's something wrong with her...or at least wrong with THAT. From the singer's POV.

Besides, it doesn't HAVE to be heard as aggressive. "What in the world is wrong with you?' seems fitting if she is normally emotionally expressive--even concerned. And that's re-enforced by the next line...what can he do?

It's the next line near the end that is jarring...to save myself from you. If it had been at the beginning, he's lost it with me. But it comes near the end, and that's when realization and self-preservation starts to kick in. He's not repeating himself, he's changing the context. It's powerful because it stands out.

Who knows, scholars may be studying this lyric 20 years from now. smile

Tell your lyricist (I'm assuming that's your partner here) that Tangmo approves. At the very least, it's a line that engenders "thought", (and maybe even a wee bit of controversy on a music forum) and that's not a bad thing at all. grin

Yeah, I like this a whole lot. Run with it. I think you have a hit.

Last edited by Tangmo; 10/24/18 04:54 AM.
BIAB 2021 Audiophile. Windows 10 64bit. Songwriter, lyricist, composer(?) loving all styles. Some pre-BIAB music from Farfetched Tangmo Band's first CD. https://alonetone.com/tangmo/playlists/close-to-the-ground