A really nice song. Some wonderful production with the changes in instrumentation that kept it fresh. I really like this soft and hopeful love song.

The only constructive comment I can think to make is so minor, I wouldn't change this unless you really want to. It might be a useful note going forward, however.

If I'm counting right, you are singing the last three syllables of "reality" (re-A-LI-TY) over half-notes. Just for that word in this context, I think you'd be better singing quarter-notes in the same melody (of course, this would produce a longer rest after the phrase). Your chords will support it. It would be more "conversational" phrased this way. As it is, it sounds just a little bit forced in an intimate song such as this. The rest of your "phrasing" seems spot-on and engaging. If I'm counting wrong, it might be changing quarter-notes to eighth-notes...same principle.

As I said...just a note going forward. Those kinds of "held notes" work great (often) in big, anthem pieces. They are to be avoided (in my view) in more intimate pieces, unless they simply must be there. It all depends on the word/phrase. As much as is musically and thematically possible, I'd try to sing it with the same general rhythm as I'd say it.

Enjoyed the listen (and the video was a nice accompaniment).


BIAB 2021 Audiophile. Windows 10 64bit. Songwriter, lyricist, composer(?) loving all styles. Some pre-BIAB music from Farfetched Tangmo Band's first CD. https://alonetone.com/tangmo/playlists/close-to-the-ground